English Grammar / Spelling Patch

[Dohi64]

Originally Posted by MattCaspermeyer

@Dohi64, I'll wait for you to get through your current play through before I post V1.2 in case you find some more...

happy to help, just be warned that it's gonna take a long while, judging from my progress so far.

edit: come to think of it, it might be better to release 1.2 sooner rather than later, that way I won't run into the same mistakes others have already found. or you could send over your updated file and I'd use that for the rest of my playthrough.

oh, and one more thing. the intellect tooltip is misleading, as I found out yesterday. it's not 10% spell damage increase after every 7 points but after every point. maybe it'd be a good idea to fix that as well.

[MattCaspermeyer]

***EDIT 2014-08-13*** Newer version available - see below ***END EDIT***

Okay, why not - here's V1.2 with all updates through post #28.

If you find more, please post 'em!

Thanks!



Matt

There is a newer update - get it here

[Dohi64]

thanks! I understand about the tooltip thing, I was just surprised when I was looking up info on whether 0 int and 6 int make a difference (because according to the tooltip it doesn't) and found out that it does, a lot. I haven't noticed anything else in this repartment, but I was never one for formulas and stuff.

[Dohi64]

here's some more.

1: I'd put a comma after turned into a werewolf.
2: that he may -> so that he may
3: comma before the names.
4: a pain -> pain

[Dohi64]

and the rest I couldn't fit into the previous post.

5: I have now -> I have not
6-7: spiders underground -> Griffins' Underground (spiders' underground is in the forest)
7: begs -> begs for

[Dohi64]

1: please forgive me (comma) I will never steal again
2: I will fight the Keepers...
3: deserved -> deserve
4: taking -> having (it's in the forest)
5: a special -> the special

[Dohi64]

6: very dangerous -> a very...
7: designed -> was designed (or: 'a light and comfortable helmet, designed...')
8: nobleman -> a nobleman

[MattCaspermeyer]

Okay, I've implemented all changes, except those identified below (or I elaborated on what was changed where necessary).

Originally Posted by Dohi64

and the rest I couldn't fit into the previous post.

7: begs -> begs for

And fixed spiders underground to be Griffin's underground.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

4: taking -> having (it's in the forest)

I don't think there's anything wrong with saying "Wonderful place for taking a rest". I would say "I'm going to take a rest in the forest", rather than "I'm going to have a rest in the forest". The word "take" here seems more assertive than "have".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

a few more.

1, bosses combat -> boss combat
2, swear in the sunrays -> swear on + in the currents -> on the currents
3, in the waters -> on the waters (also, hunters-ships would be hunter-ships, I think)

Since it is a department, they can call it whatever they like. I have no problem with Bosses Combat Department.

I implemented 2 as:

"I swear this on my blood and all the suuunrays, wind cuuurrents, and sea splaaashes of Endoria!"

This wording seemed to work better and be more consist with the turtle's speech.

For 3, I used:

"That's what I call my special hunter-ships, which maintain order of the coastal waters."

Went with "hunter-ships" and I could actually see the governor using "in the coastal waters" instead of "on" like you suggested, but I went with "of" to be more generic and mean both "in" and "on" just in case he's interested in order on the surface and below (which is perhaps why they chose "in" originally). I also changed "keep" to "maintain" since it just sounded better to me.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

the next batch.

3, crown -> Crown (or Crown -> crown) to be consistent + attack duke's castle -> attack the duke's castle

I went with "Crown" and also capitalized the "k" in "the King of Griffins" to make it more regal so: "I need the Crown of the King of Griffins".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

1, signed _by_ the...
2, captain -> Captain (also in the same file, eng_chat_1825948338_0942664360.lng, Follow captain Wetbelly's ship... -> Captain)
3, didn't seen -> haven't seen

1. Fixed all "signed by the" errors as well as there was "the the ownership" changed to just "ownership".

2. Fixed two other "captain" -> "Captain" as well in the same file.

3. "didn't seen" -> "didn't see" also in another file as well (eng_chat_0167650531_1463280583.lng).

Originally Posted by Dohi64

2, marshan swamp -> the marshan swamp (twice)
3, and once more here
4, cast -> casts

2 & 3. Okay, all "the Marshan Swamp" references are now just "Marshan Swamp" and also all "the Verlon Forest" references are just "Verlon Forest".

4. "cast fears" -> "casts fear"

Originally Posted by Dohi64

next batch, part 1.

2, so comfortable as it here in the mines -> as comfortable as it is here (50 hour and 60 hour should also be 50-hour and 60-hour)
3, submit -> submitted (I'd also leave out the second which and the comma before it)

2. "50 hour" / "60 hour" changed to "50-hour" / "60-hour" also in eng_chat_2089187752_0572642348.lng

3. "A competently composed document, which contains a great number of demands, which the striking dwarves submit to their chief." -> "A competently composed document, which contains a great number of demands the striking dwarves submitted to their chief."

Originally Posted by Dohi64

part 2.

6, show me, what -> no comma + only in complete solitude _do_ people reach
7, where are we -> where we are
8, kronberg -> I think castle kronberg would be better. I actually had to think if kronberg's even a real place in the game, I was sure they meant greenwort. (sure, it's written in the top left corner when I'm at the main castle but it's not that obvious.)

6. Hmmm...

"You see, my theory is based on the fact that only in complete solitude people reach a higher understanding of themselves and the world around them"

vs

"You see, my theory is based on the fact that only in complete solitude do people reach a higher understanding of themselves and the world around them."

The word "do" seems implied by the conversation and omitting it seems more natural during conversation even though it may be grammatically incorrect, there should be a period at the end, though. I left "do" out since omitting it seems more natural in a conversation to me.

7. Interesting comment about this one - it is sometimes natural for someone to respond with the same phrase as asked, for example: "Where are we?" may be responded as "You asked where are we?" or "You said where are we?", but I think Umdar is intelligent enough that he would change the words as you suggest (and it probably is more natural to say it that way when using the present tense of "ask").

8. There are two other places where they refer to Kronberg like this, so I think it's okay.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

part 3.

11, two-handled -> two-handed + dragons blood -> dragons' blood

I also changed "specially" -> "especially".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

4, captain -> Captain + its -> it's

I also searched all files for "captain" and tried to capitalize the "c" where it was being used as a title or as a proper name when talking to the various captains of the game.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

2, the huge -> a huge
4, no need for a comma after but
5, brave men as you -> like you

2. "The huge heavy chest, decorated with gold and jewels, the emblem of the royal family emblazoned on the lid." -> "A huge heavy chest, decorated with gold and jewels and emblazoned with the emblem of the royal family on the lid."

4. Comma moved to before but, where it should be.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

a few more before I move on to the elven lands.

12, griffin's king -> the griffin king or the griffins' king

12. Went with "the griffin king".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

1, world of death -> land of death

1. They seem to use Land of Death and World of Death interchangeably so I didn't change it.

Originally Posted by Dohi64

a ton of stuff but I'm at haas' labyrinth now, so only 2 areas left (that and murock).

2, it -> It

2. Also "them a good health" -> "them good health".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

6, lady -> Lady (although it might not be her title, it still looks better this way), house of -> House of
7, lady -> Lady

6. & 7. Went through and found one other place where it was just lady Beaulla - I followed your advice and made it "Lady Beaulla".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

11, one of many where it says dragon's labyrinth instead of dragons' labyrinth
12, the same, twice
14, same as #11-12

11., 12., and 14. Okay fixed all occurrences: "Dragon's Labyrinth" -> "Dragons' Labyrinth".

Originally Posted by Dohi64

final batch, I've finished the game (it was awesome).

3, titan/Titan inconsistency

3. Okay replaced all "titan" -> "Titan" (and variants).

Okay, that's it - release soon to follow!

Thanks for providing all these fixes - they really helped!

/C\/C\

[MattCaspermeyer]

Originally Posted by Dohi64

happy to help, just be warned that it's gonna take a long while, judging from my progress so far.

edit: come to think of it, it might be better to release 1.2 sooner rather than later, that way I won't run into the same mistakes others have already found. or you could send over your updated file and I'd use that for the rest of my playthrough.

Don't worry - when I play it literally takes me half a year to finish (although most of that is because I'm modding as I'm playing).

I did put up V1.2, though, since I figured why not.

I'll wait, though, for all your comments before I do the next one...

Originally Posted by Dohi64

oh, and one more thing. the intellect tooltip is misleading, as I found out yesterday. it's not 10% spell damage increase after every 7 points but after every point. maybe it'd be a good idea to fix that as well.

I've been avoiding the can of worms of errata since it opens up a whole new level of effort. So I'll be sticking with just grammar errors.

Technically, the tooltip is correct, except that it omits the fact that you also get +1% for each point in Intellect (so once your Intellect reaches 7, for example, you'll have 7 + 10 = 17%).

However, if someone else wants to pick up the ball of fixing game errors in the *.LNG files, don't let me stop you.

/C\/C\