The Dover Chronicles

Srinidhalaya · #1 06-15-2011, 06:43 AM

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The Dover Chronicles
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Intermission

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Cheers!

SNAFU · #2 06-15-2011, 08:17 AM

Nice work, mate

If you don´t mind a little rework, I would suggest to replace on

Page 7: Left bubble: "Wir sind getroffen" Right Bubble: "Wir sind unter Feuer" (We are under fire) or "Wir haben ein Feuer" (We have a fire here onboard)

Page 9: 109 jockey "Jetzt wirst du sterben, Tommy"

Page 10 "Jetzt habe ich Dich"

Otherwise it is quite charming the way it is now, keep it coming!

grayson1337 · #3 06-15-2011, 08:32 AM

I would suggest an alternative for SNAFUs correction for Page7: "Wir haben ein Feuer"
Try "Wir brennen!"

cheers

#4 06-15-2011, 08:53 AM

wicked mate love the idea, just like reading Commando again, bravo!
S!

Redroach · #5 06-15-2011, 09:05 AM

Noooo, as I stated in the other thread: Leave that English German alone! For a native german speaker, it has its special charme! Leave it in there!

Fjordmonkey · #6 06-15-2011, 10:47 AM

Great stuff

Lololopoulos · #7 06-15-2011, 05:50 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SNAFU

Nice work, mate

If you don´t mind a little rework, I would suggest to replace on

Page 7: Left bubble: "Wir sind getroffen" Right Bubble: "Wir sind unter Feuer" (We are under fire) or "Wir haben ein Feuer" (We have a fire here onboard)

Page 9: 109 jockey "Jetzt wirst du sterben, Tommy"

Page 10 "Jetzt habe ich Dich"

Otherwise it is quite charming the way it is now, keep it coming!

hahah coool! i was gonna ask how do you really say those things in German.
I'm glad we have a rather big german population in this forum.