no problem. although if you went with manage/falls, then the whole thing should be in present tense (turns out, slips).
and here's some more.
1, Freedom, with a capital 'f'
2, 'no, I don't remember' and 'so, what's your name' (2 missing commas)
3, the apostrophe
4, 'take poison damage' instead of 'takes...'
5, alright, comma and 'now, let me...' (missing comma)
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