Is it Leonar or Leonard?
Change "Leonar" to "Leonard" - I've struggled over this one, but I saw both references in The Legend, but only saw "Leonard" in AP from what I remember. So I tried to change them all to Leonard. Looks like I missed this one.
Change "but" to "when" although that is a little weak as well. The word "that" might be better than "when". That whole sentence just doesn't sound quite right.
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